Ok, this is the last time I'll mention this....I promise. I had printed out the latest version of the poem and put it in my pocket today because I get ideas at odd times. Wouldn't you know it, I got an epiphany in the middle of Psychology today. Heres the latest version.....I don't like the "A fury of work" line, but other than that....this is the way it'll be until my conference with the prof.
Endless Cup
Featured Facades,
Tuned in and zoned out.
Zealous schemes,
Listless cohorts,
Drinking my life.

Long talks with a pillow,
And failed affairs.
Lucky days,
Rainy nights,
Drinking my life.

A fury of work,
With restless silence.
Car rides,
Cat naps,
Drinking my life.

Faces and places,
Dreams and memories,
All drowning in
An endless cup.